(Due to a technical fault with the video file we cannot upload the video of our presentation to the media class however we can still react and adapt around the feedback that we received due to the fact that we took note of the feedback we received.)
One thing that was quickly noted as a problem with our introduction was that it seemed like a concluded video from the ideas that were presented. To fix this I will either add extra scenes to avoid it seeming like this or I will adjust certain aspects in the post production stage to make the film more like a conventional thriller opening. An example of how we can do this is through the use of titles, possibly say 'Based of a story by....' etc. which will make it more obvious that the video is a introduction rather than a concluded piece.
From the target audience feedback from the presentation we also got a better idea of which title should accompany the thriller, which after our initial ideas were rejected, was discussed in detail. As the storyline of the thriller was that the murderer is a reporter I came up with the idea 'Red Ink' and this was generally accepted by the audience of the presentation. We then briefly discussed the font that could be used in the thriller, during which I said my idea of using a font that resembled the colour and ruggedness of writing in blood.
A third thing that I got feedback on for the thriller was that the idea of an amnesia victim who has flash backs about a chase may come across as a bit hard to understand by the audience. I always knew that it would be a challenge to create an introduction in this way effectively and so wasn't surprised by this comment however it did make me consider whether or not I should scrap the idea.
Another flaw that was generally agreed with was that all of the blood, weapons and gore would come across as too cliché to the audience and I agreed with the feedback generally. I could understand why the chainsaw etc may come across as stereotypical of a thriller with a horror subgenre and so removed it from the plans. It didn't seem like a good choice to me anyway, but I thought it may add to the strange intimidating mise-en-scene in the kitchen scene and so added it to my storyboards.
Finally when we asked the members of our target audience what type of music they thought should accompany our thriller they generally responded with the usual thriller conventional type of music that is usually used in this area of film. This being disjointed ambient music as well as tension building pieces. This was something that I already had in mind however hearing it from our target audience made it a more firm decision.
(This is the PowerPoint I used in the presentation to the
class, unfortunately the video of it couldn't be uploaded)
